Suspence Write by Silvie and Jake

December 5th, 2013

Hardly breathing , I walked into the pyrimid but I wanted to go home .I turned round and saw all the entances were blocked ! I gulped! I felt sick. “help”” I exclaimed no one answered .Spooky noises went on in my head or is it real ?My heart  thumped like thunder.My teeth were chattering .Iwas hoping to wake up thinking it was a nightmare.The tomb roof shook! The coffin creaked . I thought I just found a dead body ! whilst i cried my eyes out i said “who else would do this for a adventure ? ” . The skeletons shook.

7 Responses to “Suspence Write by Silvie and Jake”

  1. Mr Mitchell on December 5, 2013 2:44 pm

    Silvie and Jake,

    Thank you so much for sharing your writing on your class blog. I really like how you have used a question in your writing. This made me think!

    Where did you get your inspiration from to write this story?

    I’d like to read what happens next, will you please create another blog post with the next part of this story?

    Mr. Mitchell

  2. 3ar on December 5, 2013 3:10 pm

    that was graet

  3. 3ar on December 5, 2013 5:03 pm

    absalootly fantastic! Silvie sand Jake it made me scared!

    even though it made me scared what is the next part!?!?

    from Roheen and Daniel

  4. 5jw on December 10, 2013 8:16 pm

    Well done good story you you put a lot of effort to it 🙂

    By Lybah from Genius Gromis 5JW 🙂

  5. Alison Waite on January 26, 2014 10:43 am

    I liked the way that you made it very scary and full of suspense. It made me want to read more. Could you write some more so I know what happens?

  6. kai p on January 28, 2014 7:32 am

    Scary story silver and Jake

  7. Alison Waite on January 28, 2014 6:19 pm

    Thankyou for that wonderfull peace of writing it was absolutely terrifying

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