Nail soup by Krish and lacey and Archie lacey

December 5th, 2013

Once upon a time, there was a traveler who was so poor he had no money. He was so hungry his tummy rumbled like thunder. One day he set of to a village at the edge of a great forest. When he got there he took his pot out of his bag and lit a fire. Next, he put the pot onto the fire.


4 Responses to “Nail soup by Krish and lacey and Archie lacey”

  1. 3ar on December 5, 2013 3:04 pm

    THAnK you for writing the first paragraph and using a simile
    pleasa write the next paragraph.

  2. 3ar on December 5, 2013 3:05 pm

    To Krish, Lacey and Archie

    We liked your simile because it made him seem very hUNGRY WE WOULD LIKE TO FIND OUT WHAT HAPPENS NEXT COULD YOU PLESE WRITE A SECOND PARAGRAOPH
    FIN

  3. Mr Mitchell on December 5, 2013 3:05 pm

    Thank you Lacey and Archie for posting the beginning of your story on your class blog. I do hope that you’ll be able to write another blog post and finish the story – Do you think you could do that?

    I like how you have used a simile ‘his tummy rumbled like thunder.’ I also like how you have used time connectives like ‘Next’.

    I’ll come back onto your blog and see if you have posted the rest of this story soon.
    Thank you.

    Mr. Mitchell

  4. 3ar on December 5, 2013 3:07 pm

    Well done for using full stops,captel letters and qesten marcs

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